Assignment 22A- Elevator Pitch Number 3
Feedback- Some of the feedback I received last week included adding in my new marketing strategy in order to not only use the full ninety seconds but to also elaborate what I planned on doing. Therefore I attempted to talk about our new program, like the Tom shoe program where they donate a pair for every pair bought, into this pitch. I also got a lot of feedback about using my hands too much which I understand completely. Lastly, I got feedback on how quickly I was talking.
Changes- In order to make this a great elevator pitch I tried to take all of the feedback so that I could really thrive. In order to not use my talks as much to talk, I brought in actual straws to give a demonstration so that if I was nervous and started using my hands again I would have something in them. Also in order to not speak as quickly, I made sure I was thinking before I spoke, allowing myself to filter the words as they appeared. Lastly, I tried to fit in my marketing plan so that I could fill up the last twenty seconds or so and to give an even deeper look into my company.
1.) Overall I definitely see the progressive improvement throughout the pitches. I think as a whole you now have a very effective elevator pitch.
ReplyDelete2.) Specifically I liked how you took the feedback into consideration. I think you talked slower, used your hands less, and had actual examples with you.
3.) you were about thirty seconds short and you said you were going to elaborate on the Tom shoe program which I didn't see, so that would be the only thing Id change.